Comment on light fires at night (to push back the void)

  1. Oh my gosh this is so perfect and lovely! I love Andrew's introspection and how hard he tries, his set-backs and his progress, the way he insists on examining and dissecting all the ugly and painful things but so often just won't let himself look at the nice and soft ones because somehow they are infinitely more scary. That line about how Andrew must have made Neil up because that's the only way he makes sense. Andrew cutting Neil's hair!!! And their mutual agreement not to mention Neil's mom/Cass, and Andrew being furious at the world for making Neil want to run, and Neil saying no but not for the reason Andrew thinks, and the scene with Roland, and Kevin watching Andrew watching Neil and understanding something, and Andrew calling Aaron back, oh my heart. ALSO Andrew sitting in Neil's lap hhghgnn. And Neil, of course, bless him, thinking he did something wrong when Andrew needs space after that. The fact that Neil asks him if he can tell him what happened, and Andrew appreciating that even if he can't. The apple and the chocolate bar. Both of them making sure the other eats on a bad day. Andrew's little vowel and consonant counting game. Both of them watching each other all the time. I am really really looking forward to the next parts and hope you have all the time and inspiration to write them, thank you for sharing this!! If you still need a beta reader or just some advice, I'd be happy to help, but I'm also not a native speaker so no worries if you have other options ;)

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    1. ♡♡♡ THANK YOU SO MUCH.

      What a wonderful comment. I love that you listed the details you liked!!! It's always very helpful and it means a lot when people do that, honestly. ♡

      Also it would be great if you could help! I can't see my own mistakes at all, so every additional pair of eyes, so to speak, is invaluable. It will probably take me a few more days to wrap up the second part of the story, but I'll let you know when I'm done. Thank you again for such a lovely comment. ♡

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      1. Aww, you're welcome! As a fellow writer I know how nice it is to get comments like that so I always try to leave one when I enjoy a fanfic. Sure, let me know and I'll do my best to help :)

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        1. Hey, would you still be interested in proofreading the second part for me? If not, that's perfectly fine, but if you happen to have some free time (and some patience to spare), could you let me know @ inthesea@yahoo.com? Thank you either way. ♡

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          1. I sent you an email!

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            1. I'm rereading this story + comments. Seeing your two mutual support is breathtaking. Actual.tears.in.my.eyes. I admire both of your writing, would N E V E R guess English is not either of your native language, and am so joy-full knowing two great writers "out there" are supporting one another in a practical way. Thank you for leading by example!

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