Comment on Fragile Vessel

  1. Nice story.

    Nitpicking: "reinforcing his disapproval of the binary code system used to designate the planets." Actually if it was binary it would be only 0s and 1s. It's not even hexidecimal which runs from 0 through F. It's just a weird arcane system that some bureaucrat came up with. Or maybe Sam?

    The Anasazi moved from that mesa over and became the Hopi people.

    Okay, Daniel thinks they're Anasazi, so they would probably be speaking an Uto-Aztecan language, yet you have Daniel speaking Lakota, which is a macro-Siouxan language related to Cherokee and Iroquois. Why???

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    1. And another question. How did Daniel know what language they spoke when the people hadn't said a word until Daniel said, "najun"? Shouldn't he have waited until they spoke to figure out what language they were speaking?

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      1. I haven't read this story in many years, but your comment is certainly true. Where were you when I was having these stories bete'd? Obviously, I could have used more editors to find my mistakes. When I write I know what I'm trying to accomplish, which means I don't always see when I've missed something because I think it's there since it's in my head. Didn't you know you were supposed to be able to read my thoughts.

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    2. Glad you liked the story, despite all the mistakes I made. To be honest, I wrote this story MANY years ago and haven't reread it for a while. I think I wrote it before I discovered that they had discovered what happened to the Anasazi. And I'm afraid I used the Lakota language because I have a Lakota language book. I think I figured it was another planet and time, so could get away with another language. I guess I should put warnings on my stories that while I do as much research as I can, I'm not always as accurate as I would like. Nickpick all you like. I may not always like to hear what I did wrong, but it's good for me to know so I don't use bad info in another story.

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      1. That's why I love reading your stories... You take constructive criticism as a springboard to making your stories even better *and* you pay attention to grammar, spelling and punctuation. Your plots, characterizations are great and I love just the way you use words. Keep writing! You can only get better. :))

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