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  1. I, um- I couldn't help but notice that you repeated a paragraph? I think you could just cut of the repeated part and it would be fine?

    He said picking a microwave and carrying it up the stars to a truck in the car park that I didn’t even notice till now.

    “ok but why did you give me a scarf?”

    “to block out the scent of the trash.”

    “ok but why a scarf?”

    “you look better in a scarf then a mask.” He said picking a microwave and carrying it up the stars to a truck in the car park that I didn’t even notice till now.

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    1. The first time he is asking why he was given a scarf the 2 time he asked why he had a scarf instead of a mask

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      1. Oh, um. I meant the part where he's moving a microwave? Up stairs? But your the author! And this is your work! So, um. Sorry!

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